Can somone offer their opinion on my poem?

Wow- dude- that's ACTUALLY a good poem- and having critiqued many a people who write bad poems, or emo poems, and have people kiss their for writing bad things- this is actually a very, very good poem. I like your rhymes, and it flows with a rhythm, it has a feel to it. I also like the like "but the water beat reinforced concrete" line for some reason. It's like- vivid, and very much in its place. This is surprisingly a gem of a poem amongst a sea of "poems" filled with clashing words, and colliding sentences, bad imagery, bad word choice, and a lack or rhyme. I very much enjoyed reading this, and I'd love to see some more of your work